I think its wonderful! Again, great style!
When you start rolling on that Fminor chord...then you drop down to a Fmin7....
then you did a huge roll (that big part where Smokie just sings NOW and does all that vocal movement.... and then back into the verse.
On that HUGE ROLL - Try getting a good, solid Gb in your bass (I normally play Gb Db/F Bb Db F and roll that out...
then Roll out Eb Ab Eb/ F Ab Db Eb
Now go back into your verse.
It makes it even MORE grandiose!
just a suggestion!
Love it!
Lisa